03-10-2012, 02:31 PM
(03-10-2012, 01:25 PM)Winter™ Wrote: Would the words:
Just an immortal man, dressed all in black
My face always ready to attack...
Would attack work?
That leaves a little too much for the imagination and leaves a gap for the reader which breaks the train of thought, which really isn't good in poetry.
Quaero gloria stellarum.