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Poem I made when I was in 9th grade for some girl.
#1
Tell me what you think. Tongue

Quote:Why Should I Try?

When You're Beautiful in my Eye...

So I ask myself, Why?

why should I Try..

Looking at the mirror, staring at a wall.

While I just lay here and watch myself fall.

These Dreams and Thoughts will never come true.

Because every single one of them involve me and you.

Now I sit here with a Broken Heart,

while slowly my mind starts to Tear Apart..
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#2
Simple, yet moving. How long did it take you to make this back then?
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#3
This is lovely, a very touching piece. Well done!
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#4
This reminded me of my first week of 6th grade back in the day.

I remember it clearly tho there was a girl named Abigale and she was in the classroom across from me my 5th period
so i would get in trouble just to go sit in the hallway and be able to see her she was an 8th grader.

I am now graduated from school and am going to end up going to college soon but long story short.

I pretty much wrote everyday in my journal about my feelings i had for this girl ( she was obviously creeped out )
But i was young and stupid and thought it would be cute so i gave her the journal to read..
and she pretty much read the first half and threw it away then never talked to me after that.

Oh well
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#5
Didn't copy right it! stealing this! lol jk Big Grin but nice poem
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#6
I don't understand how you can write a poem - seriously. Like...maybe you need to write it about something that actually means something to you. :\
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#7
Nice, very deep. Do you still write them?
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#8
Go and sing/read it to her!
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#9
You got talent ! Big Grin
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#10
This is really nice.

If I were her I'd have a tear running down my face.
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