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First attempt at poetry
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#11
09-06-2011, 03:13 PM
It was pretty nice, could use some more complexity though bigger words, different meanings etc lol.
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#12
09-06-2011, 11:23 PM
Its pretty good actually,Keep practicing and you are on the right track.
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09-07-2011, 11:53 AM (This post was last modified: 09-07-2011, 11:54 AM by FileX.)
This is actually very good for a first poem, good job Thumbsup
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#14
09-07-2011, 03:36 PM
This is awesome for your first poem.
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#15
09-08-2011, 12:52 PM
not bad i would say it was nice.
but nice try i liked it
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#16
09-08-2011, 05:28 PM
The scheme of it was pretty good.
You seem to be on the right path Smile.
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#17
09-10-2011, 11:09 AM
(09-06-2011, 03:13 PM)Blazin Wrote: It was pretty nice, could use some more complexity though bigger words, different meanings etc lol.

English isn't my first language. It's hard to come up with bigger words, but I'll try.
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#18
09-15-2011, 08:10 PM
This is great, I hope you keep it up man! / respect
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#19
09-15-2011, 08:41 PM
Great for a first attempt, its really deep stuff lol.
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#20
09-17-2011, 03:12 AM
That is very nice. Made me feel like writing some.
With the Cancer that spreads, its a stab in the ribs, to see someone you love slowly dying before your eyes, the darkness takes over the blue skys
angels fall, and demons rise, this back and forth with emotion is like a rollercoast ride.
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