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[Poem] Forever
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04-29-2011, 03:26 AM (This post was last modified: 04-29-2011, 04:08 AM by BlackChaos.)
How I feel when I think of her,
Floating on the clouds of bliss,
I lie still, breath a whisper,
And no heartbeat amiss.

Give me a sign, a ray of light I hoped,
Let the future betrays us not.
The day we met, the night we eloped,
The fear and insecurity we fought.

Sky filled with music and life as we sing,
Sweet songs of love across countless pages.
Our voice of harmony, in the air it rings,
I wish the clock ran for ages and ages.

The days we lost, when we were miles apart,
I regret, I mourn, I wait.
You'll live with me, forever in my heart,
An enternal day, but a moment too late.


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Author's Note: This poem is dedicated to those who have ever lost someone they loved.
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04-29-2011, 03:28 AM
Very good poem. You have skills and you should continue writing!
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04-29-2011, 06:44 AM
(04-29-2011, 03:28 AM)Nympho Wrote: Very good poem. You have skills and you should continue writing!

Thank you (^_^)
I surely will.
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04-29-2011, 10:18 AM
I like it and I was actually going through ideas for a poem with this structure, or maybe a Haiku for fun.

And yeah, this poem brought up feelings Tongue thanks for making it and sharing it.
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04-29-2011, 11:04 AM
(04-29-2011, 10:18 AM)Veryx Wrote: I like it and I was actually going through ideas for a poem with this structure, or maybe a Haiku for fun.

And yeah, this poem brought up feelings Tongue thanks for making it and sharing it.

I'm just trying out different structures and concepts. Expanding my creative scope and all Tongue
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04-29-2011, 11:45 AM
Quote:You'll live with me, forever in my heart,
An enternal day, but a moment too late.

This part got to me. Really nice poem, keep it up.
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04-29-2011, 11:52 AM
(04-29-2011, 11:45 AM)eax Wrote: This part got to me. Really nice poem, keep it up.

Thanks mate Big Grin
I tried hard to make those two lines perfect.
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04-30-2011, 04:11 AM
Nice poem, keep writing, I might write one someday Smile
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04-30-2011, 04:50 AM
Great poem , brings out your true feelings . Keep on going mate .
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04-30-2011, 05:07 AM
(04-30-2011, 04:11 AM)Napsta Wrote: Nice poem, keep writing, I might write one someday Smile

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(04-30-2011, 04:50 AM)Telhast Wrote: Great poem , brings out your true feelings . Keep on going mate .

Thanks bro. Will do Big Grin
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