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[Poem] Forever - BlackChaos - 04-29-2011
How I feel when I think of her,
Floating on the clouds of bliss,
I lie still, breath a whisper,
And no heartbeat amiss.
Give me a sign, a ray of light I hoped,
Let the future betrays us not.
The day we met, the night we eloped,
The fear and insecurity we fought.
Sky filled with music and life as we sing,
Sweet songs of love across countless pages.
Our voice of harmony, in the air it rings,
I wish the clock ran for ages and ages.
The days we lost, when we were miles apart,
I regret, I mourn, I wait.
You'll live with me, forever in my heart,
An enternal day, but a moment too late.
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Author's Note: This poem is dedicated to those who have ever lost someone they loved.
RE: [Poem] - Nympho - 04-29-2011
Very good poem. You have skills and you should continue writing!
RE: [Poem] - BlackChaos - 04-29-2011
(04-29-2011, 03:28 AM)Nympho Wrote: Very good poem. You have skills and you should continue writing!
Thank you (^_^)
I surely will.
RE: [Poem] Forever - Metapod - 04-29-2011
I like it and I was actually going through ideas for a poem with this structure, or maybe a Haiku for fun.
And yeah, this poem brought up feelings
thanks for making it and sharing it.
RE: [Poem] Forever - BlackChaos - 04-29-2011
(04-29-2011, 10:18 AM)Veryx Wrote: I like it and I was actually going through ideas for a poem with this structure, or maybe a Haiku for fun.
And yeah, this poem brought up feelings
I'm just trying out different structures and concepts. Expanding my creative scope and all
Glad you liked it.
RE: [Poem] Forever - eax - 04-29-2011
Quote:You'll live with me, forever in my heart,
An enternal day, but a moment too late.
This part got to me. Really nice poem, keep it up.
RE: [Poem] Forever - BlackChaos - 04-29-2011
(04-29-2011, 11:45 AM)eax Wrote: This part got to me. Really nice poem, keep it up.
Thanks mate
I tried hard to make those two lines perfect.
RE: [Poem] Forever - Napsta - 04-30-2011
Nice poem, keep writing, I might write one someday
RE: [Poem] Forever - Telhast - 04-30-2011
Great poem , brings out your true feelings . Keep on going mate .
RE: [Poem] Forever - BlackChaos - 04-30-2011
(04-30-2011, 04:11 AM)Napsta Wrote: Nice poem, keep writing, I might write one someday
You're welcome to unleash your creativity
PM me anytime if you need anything.
(04-30-2011, 04:50 AM)Telhast Wrote: Great poem , brings out your true feelings . Keep on going mate .
Thanks bro. Will do