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Common cents isn't so common ;)
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02-18-2011, 07:06 PM (This post was last modified: 07-30-2020, 12:55 PM by fuck_prohibition.)
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02-18-2011, 09:36 PM (This post was last modified: 02-18-2011, 09:36 PM by cOld fus1on.)
That's pretty decent, but the part 'bout "make you a happy women" , doesn't really fit, I mean, she's not more than one woman...,
You could say.., "when we raise our baby"
"I'll make you a happy lady"

But other than that, you did a good job, nicely written brah...
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02-18-2011, 10:34 PM (This post was last modified: 07-30-2020, 12:55 PM by fuck_prohibition.)
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02-19-2011, 11:41 PM
Nice poem. Are you going to turn this in as an English project?
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