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RedactedRedacted - fuck_prohibition - 02-18-2011
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RE: New Poem - cOld fus1on - 02-18-2011
That's pretty decent, but the part 'bout "make you a happy women" , doesn't really fit, I mean, she's not more than one woman...,
You could say.., "when we raise our baby"
"I'll make you a happy lady"
But other than that, you did a good job, nicely written brah...
RedactedRedacted - fuck_prohibition - 02-18-2011
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RE: New Poem - Iris - 02-19-2011
Nice poem. Are you going to turn this in as an English project?