Poem

[Canoris]

Loving you

My heart beats a little bit faster
When you lips brush against mine
And when I look into your eyes
I think that we stop time

My breath seems to quicken
When your bodies pressed against me
And when I feel your breath on my neck
I feel like it's almost to good to be

My mind seems to slow
No matter what we do
Cause time and problems melt away
And all I see is you

Original work by
Bloodrain2011

So what do you guys think about this? Give it to me hard...Bash me hard if you must XD

Copyright eh? Well, I like the intensity and the physical moments/emotions before letting go. Good descriptive words.... not all poetry has to have a rhyme scheme, but yours' is off. Overall a good poem though!