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Daniel Faraday Offline
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#7
08-21-2010, 06:33 PM
The only thing I didn't like about it were the first two lines.

I started it off in first person, but switched it to third in the second line.
I also reused the word wait, which I don't really like to do. Especially in lines that are paired.

I was pretty busy posting a Python guide on HF and taking care of my dog, but I'll try to post something before the night's end.
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Death - by Daniel Faraday - 08-17-2010, 04:48 PM
RE: Death - by Sam - 08-17-2010, 05:29 PM
RE: Death - by Virtual Reality - 08-20-2010, 07:13 PM
RE: Death - by Daniel Faraday - 08-17-2010, 05:44 PM
RE: Death - by nikjerry - 08-20-2010, 04:18 AM
RE: Death - by ndee - 08-20-2010, 06:49 AM
RE: Death - by Daniel Faraday - 08-21-2010, 06:33 PM

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