No shooting star

[Anon]

Hello,

I wrote this song for my girlfriend in hoping that she likes it, i would like to share it with use and please put your true thoughts into this.



I know a girl with these beautiful eyes

Whenever i walk by she makes me so happy

It's like i'm living in a whole different world

i know that she will always be there

i am happy to call her my girl



If only there was one day one time

that i could, reach up to the sky i'd

i'd take a star or two down for you baby

ohhh yeah you know its true

just remember that our love



Ohhh Our love didn't come from no shooting star

this is real, this is true baby this is forever

from now and on your not alone noooo

and from that day you've stolen my heart

i know you wil keep it in one part



You are everything that i want

but i just never knew it was needed

You are everything i need

but i just never knew i wanted

everything i say is true baby



Ohhh Our love didn't come from no shooting star

this is real, this is true baby this is forever

from now and on your not alone noooo

and from that day you've stolen my heart

i know you wil keep it in one part

[Impulses SF]

The lyrics are sentimental and touching.
However I would like to hear it in action! Although if she really cares about you, she won't mind if it's terrible.

[WhiteFlame]

Haha, I worte a TERRIBLE poem for my GF and she thought it was really sweet. The moral of the story is to say that you meant every word thats what really matters.

Doesn;t matter how bad it is. In fairness to you this is good so you are bi-winning here. Nice sentiment and nice poem

[Anon]

Thank you white flame i am actually going into the music career, as i will be recording my own album and giving it to her.

[BlackChaos]

This is really good Anon
If you're going into the music business, one piece of advice. Try not to meld over to trending pop cultures. Just stay true to your music.

Good luck

[G0dfath3r]

Pretty impressive mate,I think you have shared lot of thoughts and beautiness of her.I like the way you wrote it,keep doing it and i'm sure she will likes it.
All the best.

[Hуѕтєяιa X™]

I think this was very well done. Nice going on this, impressive to say the least. I wouldn't mind hearing that being sung, you have a creative mind, hope to see more of your work.

[Atthackers]

Wow! You put a lot of hart into that! Hope your GF likes it!

[shopping]

The lyrics are sentimental and touching.

[!LoL]

Ohhh Our love didn't come from no shooting star

this is real, this is true baby this is forever

from now and on your not alone noooo

and from that day you've stolen my heart

i know you wil keep it in one part