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Review my essay! - Cannabis - 05-26-2010 Well I just wrote an essay for english and I would like you to rate and tell me what and how to fix my mistakes or help me edit it. Everything is greatly appreciated. Code: To Kill a Mocking Bird RE: Review my essay! - Jake - 05-26-2010 What grade level is it? RE: Review my essay! - Cannabis - 05-26-2010 9th grade. RE: Review my essay! - Jake - 05-26-2010 Alright well for starters, you probably shouldn't use rhetorical questions, you shouldn't use I, you, we, etc. Also your essay is really short. Another thing is that you should further develop your thesis statement instead of just listing 3 different things. Also before that, in the beginning of your introductory paragraph, you should put the title in italics and say who wrote the book. RE: Review my essay! - Vipermakd - 05-26-2010 I like it but it's way too short it looks like a statement u've just made.it should be about 1 and a half page long. Must contain proper paragraphs and yes also mention headings. RE: Review my essay! - Cannabis - 05-26-2010 Headings? Kind of lost a little bit sorry. My teacher assigned it to be no longer than 2 pages and 5 paragraphs file http://classjump.com/mscaponigri/documents/4400750548.doc there is a rubric from the teacher. RE: Review my essay! - Buffy - 05-27-2010 You assert that the word 'Yoda' disfigures children, but, why? You have yet to argue successfully why children viewing contradictory and morally incorrect actions/words. So, improve your arguments, don't just assert; and, while revising, stay away from passive sentences and the word 'it'. If you start these habits today, your writing will drastically improve. RE: Review my essay! - shanker - 06-01-2010 I agree, it shouldn't be in book stores. RE: Review my essay! - robbiecee2 - 06-07-2010 This is a very short essay. |