Writing for the first time

[NekoChan]

Are you kidding me? How is that thread even relevant? Sad excuse for a human we have here...I'm taking a break from SF.

So you judge me online and say I am a sad excuse for a human?
I really dislike kids like you, but hey every forum has one of those, just go pitch your balls gayboy. I hope you leave the forum.


Anyone else has anything to say?

[Peter L]

You ask for opinions and when you get them, you attempt to insult the person criticizing you. You're honestly in no place to be calling anyone a gayboy. Anyway..like I said I'm taking a break from Support Forums for a little bit.

[NekoChan]

You ask for opinions and when you get them, you attempt to insult the person criticizing you. You're honestly in no place to be calling anyone a gayboy. Anyway..like I said I'm taking a break from Support Forums for a little bit.

You taking a break doesn't have anything to do with my thread.

[Untitled]

In my opinion, be more insightful. Example;

“You probably could beat them both, if you came back to fight here” she insisted in a stubborn manner.

Now, I don't know if stubborn is what you intended that line to feel as, but I think you catch my drift.

[NekoChan]

In my opinion, be more insightful. Example;

“You probably could beat them both, if you came back to fight here” she insisted in a stubborn manner.

Now, I don't know if stubborn is what you intended that line to feel as, but I think you catch my drift.

A better wording and feel to the dialogue? I will try to make it better, thank you.

I now have finished chapter 2, I will start uploading them soon to somewhere.