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#1
When I was lonely, no one cared,
They discarded me, regarded me like a worn out old shoe
But you were different.
You saw past your indifference
And we realized we aren't so different

We both sing our melodies to the same tune
Our destiny's intertwine, we both share a bloodline
To care for ourselves and people who need us the most
But you gave up too much
Left no love for yourself

So now you're gone and I'm left,
With nothingness inside in my chest
I'm bleeding my heart out for you
I'm crying my eyes out for you
You were the only one who knew me

For you my feelings true
But you gave me not a cent of patience
And its tearing out my conscience in two
Because unconsciously I'm wishing for you to stay too

I'd blow my brains out
I'd do anything for you
No one could ever know me as well as you do
My nights wind away to days thinking about you
If I could have a moment in silence,
I'd pray to God, yes I would
To take my life instead of yours, because my life is you

You're the one who took me under your wing
Protected me till I was ready and out the cage I flew
If I didn't know better,
I'd always turn towards you.
You have the accolades of kindness, wisdom and truth,
This me paying homage to every thing that you do.
The bright light on my horizon,
The sun on my side,
That little voice inside of me that always knows what is right.



Author's Note: Definitely an emotional poem. Don't remember much about why or how I wrote, but that I felt something strong within me when I did. Hope you all like it.
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#2
Were you meaning to rhyme or was it free verse? Either way it's a really good poem just want to see what type.

I say this because some of the lines end in the same word.
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#3
Was this a tribute to your mother?

Great poem, I loved it and I felt the emotion through it. 10/10
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#4
Very very nice man seems like you have a good heart...but what is it a tribute to or whom


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#5
(07-03-2011, 04:59 AM)Remorse Wrote: Were you meaning to rhyme or was it free verse? Either way it's a really good poem just want to see what type.

I say this because some of the lines end in the same word.

Originally it was supposed to rhyme, but I felt too restricted and turned it to free verse.




(07-04-2011, 10:48 AM)Veryx Wrote: Was this a tribute to your mother?

Great poem, I loved it and I felt the emotion through it. 10/10

(07-04-2011, 10:51 AM)Ted Bundy Wrote: Very very nice man seems like you have a good heart...but what is it a tribute to or whom

Perhaps. I don't exactly remember who I though of when I wrote it, but this poem is dedicated to everyone in my life who has supported me and led down the right path. Smile

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#6
A beautiful poem bro, good job. Your a major contributor to this section of the forum. Keep writing poems and keep up the artistic level. Big Grin

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(07-08-2011, 09:06 AM)Mayhem Wrote: A beautiful poem bro, good job. Your a major contributor to this section of the forum. Keep writing poems and keep up the artistic level. Big Grin

Aww. Thanks mate. Smile
Glad you liked it.
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#8
Nice poem man, this is something I can really relate to
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#9
Awhh Sad
This was a emotional poem bro and very "meaningful".

Did you write it to your girlfriend or someone special to you?
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(07-20-2011, 11:47 PM)Bad Meets Evil Wrote: Awhh Sad
This was a emotional poem bro and very "meaningful".

Did you write it to your girlfriend or someone special to you?

I wrote it, thinking about a friend actually. Never told him I wrote it for him.
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