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#21
06-21-2011, 10:58 AM
Thanks again for the constructive criticism :-)!
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06-24-2011, 07:42 AM
I didn't really like it, it's too...sudden i can't think of any other words to describe it.
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06-24-2011, 08:51 AM
(06-24-2011, 07:42 AM)JustHayden Wrote: I didn't really like it, it's too...sudden i can't think of any other words to describe it.

I did that on purpose actually. I was very young when this happened, and it was all happening so quickly. I wanted to try to give everyone the view I had through my own eyes. So many things happened all too quickly, so the story is rushed.

This wasn't made up by the way, this is something from my past but thanks for the criticism Smile
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06-25-2011, 04:25 PM
(06-24-2011, 08:51 AM)Veryx Wrote: I did that on purpose actually. I was very young when this happened, and it was all happening so quickly. I wanted to try to give everyone the view I had through my own eyes. So many things happened all too quickly, so the story is rushed.

This wasn't made up by the way, this is something from my past but thanks for the criticism Smile

I like how you thought deeply.
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06-25-2011, 05:37 PM
(06-25-2011, 04:25 PM)Pulse. Wrote: I like how you thought deeply.

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