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05-24-2011, 02:47 AM
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Hey friends i had recently make a poem which i want to share with you.This is specially for my betrayed love.so guys it's my 1st try.I'm not good at writing but just want to convey my message through poetry.
In the night of sorrow,
in the depth of my heart,
I feel the aloneness,
to hide my sorrow i uses to weep,
now a days love is like a toy,
some one play with you.
and leave you alone.
dedicated to my betrayed love.
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05-24-2011, 05:09 AM
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No mate,i'm not a native english speaker.But i'm biggest fond of english poetry that's why i tried to make a poem.Actually these are my heart saying words.btw thanks for appreciation.
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For your first poem, you've done a good job!
if ( ( youAreHappy) && (youKnowIt) )
clapYourHands();
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Very well adviced haroon (blackchaos) bro.
OP follow his advices i am sure after some time you'll be able to write better poems. Oh btw work hard on your english, you've potential just work hard.
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Nice poem!
I have 2 poems published in a book! I will post them in a new thread later tonight!
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