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Ambition Offline
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03-25-2011, 11:23 PM (This post was last modified: 04-08-2011, 12:34 AM by Ambition.)
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One day, your life will flash before your eyes. Make sure it's worth watching.
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03-25-2011, 11:34 PM
Damn dude, I actually read that whole thing.
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03-25-2011, 11:38 PM
I love it, really do.
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03-25-2011, 11:55 PM
(03-25-2011, 11:38 PM)GrammarPhreak Wrote: I love it, really do.

Really? I HATED IT. But I couldn't help but post it, knowing others might perceive it otherwise. Thanks for your input. Means a lot.
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03-26-2011, 05:39 PM
Anybody else in the mood to leave some constructive feedback?
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#6
03-26-2011, 05:42 PM
I think it's pretty good, better than my poems at least.
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03-26-2011, 05:42 PM
Nice crap. Good poem. Never seen a poem like this on any forum. Good crap dawg!
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03-26-2011, 06:04 PM
Not too bad, It has the feel of a free verse poem, nothing 100% organized about the lines though, which is why I would consider this free verse.
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03-26-2011, 08:51 PM
(03-26-2011, 06:04 PM)Infinity Wrote: Not too bad, It has the feel of a free verse poem, nothing 100% organized about the lines though, which is why I would consider this free verse.

That's exactly what I was going for. Thanks for the feedback everyone. Keep it coming!
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03-26-2011, 09:01 PM
(03-26-2011, 08:51 PM)Ambition Wrote: That's exactly what I was going for. Thanks for the feedback everyone. Keep it coming!

Free verse is more for the thought process of the reader, and you've put a few lines in here that would raise the readers thinking level, so it's good. Most other types of poems are for sarcasm or imagery in some shape or form of detail. More of the fancy rhyme scheme types.

I'd like to see a few more of those around the creative writing area. Lots of people generally go for a diary/journal/personal response type of writing in here.
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