My first Song. -Rap Lyrics

[Cira]

The song is about my ex-girlfriend and my previous drug addication. (Which I've successfully tossed aside.)

One More Thing

Rainclouds gather, raindrops drippin'.
One more and I would drown in this world where I am trippin'.
My friends ignore me and formed a group where I don't fit in.
So tired of waitin' for those damn pills to kick in.
My mama doesn't know me,
my father lost his homie.
My shawty turned her back isn't there anymore to hold me.
Slowly, I wipe my tears and think 'bout what my grandma told me.
"From heaven, I'll look down on you, so come now, don't feel lonely."

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[chorus]
One more morning, a whole new day.
I close my eyes and do not know what to say.
Doesn't matter how much you say you love me,
you know I love you too.
Girl, you colour my day, by simply looking my way,
but there's one more thing I should do..

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How could I ever know that I'd fall this low?
It's harder to get up with those depressions on the go.
See my life flashin' for my eyes, I have tickets for the first row.
Still no one's ever listening when I flick spits on my flow.
So I'll retake it slow.
Give people a preview and invite them to my show.
And my show is the game,
I'm so tired of always being the first one to blame.
But if granda could keep on fighting, then maybe I should do the same..

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This still isn't finished.
I just wanted to hear a personal opinion.

Thanks in advance.

[Plick]

Sounds really good so far, are you thinking about actually rapping to this or you just write songs for this to get by?

By the way, you spelled "grandma" wrong in the last line.

Good job though!

[iMario]

Very nice! Would you record it?

[Impuhlsive]

Very nice! Would you record it?

Ya you should defiantly post a video on youtube would be cool.

[Cira]

Sounds really good so far, are you thinking about actually rapping to this or you just write songs for this to get by?

By the way, you spelled "grandma" wrong in the last line.

Good job though!

Oh, thanks for that.
Didn't see it.

And yes, I'm going to record it as soon as I finish it.

[χєℓD4RK-H4x0Rℓєχ]

WOW sounds like a hit ;) Keep it up with the good work !!!

[KillaMuvZ]

Wow after recording make sure to share it with us! Looks really awesome so far!

[wtftwice]

Damn, very well written.
I'm looking forward to hearing the recording.

[Solarboy]

Looks pretty good to me.

Are you going to sing this?

[Mous]

I always find reading these difficult,
Either they seem too long to add to a song,
or I just am too rep-illiterate to put them to a beat in my head.