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Love Poetry
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Very nice poem. I love the structure and the meaning. It sounds to me like it's come from the heart, true feelings for someone?

Favorite line:

"The beauty of your eyes, the softness of your skin;
Admiring you is such pleasure, it must be a sin;"


However I think this didn't work:

My happiness, my hope, and freedom of all fears;
Always my love, not matter how far or near;


The speech doesn't flow for me on that line. However it's a great first poem. I look forward to reading more.

p.s. You also but "Not matter" Big Grin
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I had real trouble with that line.
This isn't my first btw, just my first in a long time. I used to do this a lot.
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(10-19-2010, 05:36 PM)Jay Wrote: I had real trouble with that line.
This isn't my first btw, just my first in a long time. I used to do this a lot.

I can tell it's not your first. I really liked it. One of my favorite on SF.
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#5
You tell you love me,
and I know it's true


Favourite line. Did you enjoy writing this?
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#6
More will follow..................../
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#7
Thank you, sweetheart.
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(10-20-2010, 05:46 PM)Eve Wrote: Thank you, sweetheart.

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#9
Thought, sought, ought, fought.
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#10
Good job. Its nice. Smile
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