A rap I've made.

[Tate]

You need to add some "internal rhymes" and some alliteration.

Instead of (exampe, I used this in my own rap):
"Lets figure out why you how hip hop will die"

You should use:
"Comon lets pry into why you want real hip hop to die"




Or like in an Eminem song, instead of saying:
"I sat down quicker than a fat person"

You'd say:
"I fell on my ass faster than a fat bitch who sat down to fast"