Opinion on a Poem

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A Moment Lost To Time
by James Watari

I wish I could tell you now, what I was afraid to tell you then
If I had spoken you would know that you were my bliss
What I would give if I could live yesterday again
I would hold you until the end with a goodbye and final kiss

If I had spoken you would know that you were my bliss
I should have cherish every second, every breath
I would hold you until the end with a goodbye and final kiss
Now this soul is hollow, for eternity, scarred with regret

I should have cherish every second, every breath
Now you can no longer breathe
Now this soul is hollow, for eternity, scarred with regret
Scars burst open as my broken heart continues to bleed

Now you can no longer breathe
I scream!! Hoping that maybe you will hear my voice
Scars burst open as my broken heart continues to bleed
I would be the one on my way to the unknown… If in the end it was my choice

I scream!! Hoping that maybe you will hear my voice
I know my shouting is in vain
I would be the one on my way to the unknown… If in the end it was my choice
The gods have lost a dear child, their tears create the piercing rain

I know my shouting is in vain
What I would give if I could live yesterday again
The gods have lost a dear child, their tears create the piercing rain
I wish I could tell you now, what I was afraid to tell you then