06-21-2011, 10:45 AM
The story was nice, I liked the last line a lot. "the light that was once his. Has now gone forever." it has a nice feel with the rest of your story.
My only negative criticism is to check your grammar, punctuation, and to a certain extent the flow of the story.
I loved the story though and it did give me some inspiration to write a story about a mishap of mine.
7/10
My only negative criticism is to check your grammar, punctuation, and to a certain extent the flow of the story.
I loved the story though and it did give me some inspiration to write a story about a mishap of mine.
7/10
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