Seems like you're progressing. Here's what I'd change to the first two paragraphs (just my personal "preference):
"The ground shakes beneath me and I see the ground cracking wider and wider. I wonder why this had to happen to us. Why it couldn't have been someone else, and why me? I guess I should explain to you who I am, or better yet, “what" I am.
My name is Experiment – 25, but I go by Josh. I was not born but made by the military in a laboratory. I know we were made to be the ultimate war weapons, but I guess I should explain what I mean.
I am not a normal 16 year old boy - I have powers that would have once been seen as a fantasy or impossible. However, we all now know it is very possible."
I'd also recommend you just try fleshing out some of your ideas into longer paragraphs.
"The ground shakes beneath me and I see the ground cracking wider and wider. I wonder why this had to happen to us. Why it couldn't have been someone else, and why me? I guess I should explain to you who I am, or better yet, “what" I am.
My name is Experiment – 25, but I go by Josh. I was not born but made by the military in a laboratory. I know we were made to be the ultimate war weapons, but I guess I should explain what I mean.
I am not a normal 16 year old boy - I have powers that would have once been seen as a fantasy or impossible. However, we all now know it is very possible."
I'd also recommend you just try fleshing out some of your ideas into longer paragraphs.
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