12-23-2010, 03:52 AM
(12-21-2010, 08:17 PM)Solidus Wrote: Bad use of syllables. Be(1) and quality(3) for example.
Apart from that you took no notice of the Iambic Pentameter. It really does not sound very good. You think poems are merely about rhyming at the end? Nonononono. There is much more to it. Think of a 'Shakespearean Sonnet'. Those types of poems are poems to be reckoned with. I wrote some nice poems in my time, I might try to dig some out for you guys.