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Yin's Poetry - Hatrid Ex
#1
I wrote this one for iBruteforce, tell me how you like it.

Aversion Matron


The one I used to call my amour
Left me with much anguish.
She said she had a fond cherish,
Then what was the reason to vanish?

I thought I admired her,
Now I despise her.
She's not that elegant,
Could find better in the terrace.

We once had something memorable,
At this time I can't connote my despair,
I wish I could smell that luscious hair.
It's true, I do despise her
But she was altered.

She was deferential, never pyschotic,
I called her bionic.
I wish I had her again,
Even though this is where it cessates.
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#2
Personally I like it.

IBruteforce might slap you though.....
Pm me if you need assistance with anything.
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#3
Nah, he liked it.
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#4
I like it Smile
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#5
Personally the poetry to me. It is very good and nicely written.
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#6
Great. 9/10
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#7
That is really nice Yin. I would like to see a lot more of your poems posted hereOui
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#8
That's actually really good, I must say!
Write me one of these? Big Grin
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Now you're in denial
Thought you were the only one until you found my number on the speed dial
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#9
Nice

why's it seem like iBF is a girl
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#10
I like it, except for the bionic part, I didn't really understand it. Blink
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