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[Short Poem] Blood
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07-16-2011, 07:11 PM
Very meaningful but you should add more poetic techniques into it.
Not trying to be your school teacher but similes, alliteration, etc all add to the effect.
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07-16-2011, 11:15 PM
Nice poem man, I like it Smile
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07-17-2011, 12:41 PM
(07-16-2011, 07:11 PM)Blic Wrote: Very meaningful but you should add more poetic techniques into it.
Not trying to be your school teacher but similes, alliteration, etc all add to the effect.

Thanks for the constructive criticism, I'll work on that
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