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Poem: How life started - Death Trap™ - 01-04-2011 Life all started as soon as a baby is conceive A fetus who is unable to see the world outside as we perceive that a father and mother had came together to procreate Kept inside the womb till the birth date As the baby's heart pounds away in a confined space In a dark place where it developed at its own pace Being unaware of what is happening around Its heartbeat pulsating throughout a mother's warm and comfort womb 9 months of torture a mother would endure To bring something beautiful into this world A magnificent gift; it has to be for sure Eventually time drawn near as the couple hurled A baby who is about to be introduced A mother who gave all her boost As everyone patiently waiting for the grand news Time seems to be still as the baby pull throughs It takes it first breath of life The husband stood by his wife It lets out its first cry The couple had done it on their first try RE: Poem: How life started - Raain - 01-04-2011 Damn I really enjoyed reading this. This sure has potential, but are u sure the words and the meaning of it fit the concept? Kept inside the wound till the birth date shouldnt that be womb? (if you meant it like that, i apologize, just thought it was a bit odd) RE: Poem: How life started - Death Trap™ - 01-04-2011 (01-04-2011, 01:47 PM)Raain Wrote: Damn I really enjoyed reading this. Sorry. I did misspell it. lol I just wrote it on the spot. It couldve been better if I put more thoughts to it. I probably might revise it. |