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About my crush. - lunagron - 11-27-2010 When she smiles, my heart goes wild. This happens everyday, but I don't know what to say. I feel like we should be together, It doesn't have to be forever. I need to know why, Before I start to cry. She is so perfect, Not just your common suspect. I don't know how this came to be, There is no way I can agree. I'll make this work, before I go berserk. I'll find a way, It'll be okay. RE: About my crush. - Solidus - 11-27-2010 Pretty good. Try to use the same amount of syllables on rhyming words. 'Everyday'(3) and 'Say'(1) doesn't sound good at all. Or at least only 1 syllable difference. RE: About my crush. - lunagron - 11-27-2010 (11-27-2010, 07:47 PM)Solidus Wrote: Pretty good. I appreciate the feedback and criticism. Thank you. RE: About my crush. - Legit Kid ™ - 11-28-2010 Very deep, im not really a poetry type of guy but it was really good i have to say. RE: About my crush. - Charmz - 11-28-2010 You did a very good job writing this. RE: About my crush. - lunagron - 11-28-2010 Thanks guys! RE: About my crush. - N.O.R.E - 11-28-2010 Very deep, im not really a poetry type of guy but it was really good i have to say. RE: About my crush. - lunagron - 11-28-2010 (11-28-2010, 05:46 PM)Killuminati Wrote: Very deep, im not really a poetry type of guy but it was really good i have to say. Thanks. I really appreciate it. |