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Great poem. I like your AA BB rhyme scheme. You fell off the pattern in the 3rd stanza, but either way.
8/10!
Pretty nice poem. I can't rhyme for crap, but when I attempt, I don't make anything near this standard.
I like how you managed to portray society, and stick to the OP.