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A Beautiful Little Dream

…And then you walked into the room…

So beautiful were your eyes when I gazed upon them

Shining like diamonds in the most perfect display that only heaven could perfect

And when you spoke, the sound of your voice was as sweet as drips of honey from the finger tips of God, leaving me helpless like a sailor against the siren’s call.

If then was I not already captivated you left your crowd of beloved and sat beside me and shown me a smile that would make the most noble of angels grace the lips of lust.


If you want to read the full poem, please take a view at my blog.
http://itylernallen.tumblr.com/post/1728...ttle-dream

This is quite beautiful Tyler.
I especially love your use of similes, although I think you might have missed a comma in the last sentence.
I'll be checking out your full post on your blog as well.
Great work and I would love for you to share some more with us!

(02-09-2012, 05:39 AM)BlackChaos Wrote: [ -> ]This is quite beautiful Tyler.
I especially love your use of similes, although I think you might have missed a comma in the last sentence.
I'll be checking out your full post on your blog as well.
Great work and I would love for you to share some more with us!

Thanks, I am glad you like it. I have another one on my blog as well. So if you want to read that one you may.

It's a great poem, no doubt. In the last sentence,

Quote:If ten was I not already captivated

typo?
Also, your profile picture is sideways

(02-09-2012, 07:21 PM)D3xus Wrote: [ -> ]It's a great poem, no doubt. In the last sentence, typo?
Also, your profile picture is sideways

Caught that. And yeah, its supposed to be sideways. lol

It's short but I like it, I'm going to follow you at twitter to see if you have any other interesting stuff

following

I love this! Keep up the great work, Can you make another one that is longer?

So nice of you!
Enjoy reading it

Seems like everyone loves it! Keep it up!

Nice poem, I even read the whole poem on your blog!

I've always wanted to write poetry, but I don't have the inspiration to do so..