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Sounds like rap in my head, I like it. There is a nice rhythm to the syllables as well.
Were you listening to music when you wrote this? Or did you have a particular imagery in mind?
I had an image in my head. Not intended to be a rap though. Thanks for the feedback.
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I read your other posts. You seem like a thoughtful person who is sensitive with words and their meanings. It is wonderful to have members like you who contribute to this section.
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This is really nice
It sounded more of a rap to me though.
I concur with Ms. Eve. It would seem to me that your composition of words is quite exceptional. And yes, it did seem much like a rap, even though rap is the either complete ignorance + unique usage of imagery + words, or, advanced sensitivity to the words and meanings + advanced composition of the words and how they work together.