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That's pretty decent, but the part 'bout "make you a happy women" , doesn't really fit, I mean, she's not more than one woman...,
You could say.., "when we raise our baby"
"I'll make you a happy lady"
But other than that, you did a good job, nicely written brah...
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Nice poem. Are you going to turn this in as an English project?